College Essays About Life Changing Experiences

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What defines someone as a person? Is it their personality? Or just their life experiences? I believe that meaningful events, experiences, and accomplishments ultimately defines someone. Something significant and meaningful that has happened in my life was getting involved in organized sports. I’ve played every sport from soccer to football. If I never got involved in sports, I wouldn’t be the person I am today. Playing sports has taught me a plethora of things including responsibility, integrity, value of hard work, confidence, and much more. Getting involved in sports was definitely a life changing experience.

Ever since I was five years old, I have been involved in competitive sports. I’ve played basketball, soccer, baseball, tennis, hockey, and football. Basketball was always my main sport. Even though playing basketball was a great experience, it was also life changing and eye opening. Unfortunately I wasn’t always the tallest, fastest, or best player around and it caused a lot of people to insult me. They would always say “midget,” “chubby,” or whatever else they decided to call me because of the lack of respect. All of these insults caused many tears and thoughts of quitting. I played basketball for nine years and, through all of the insults and disrespect, I never quit. When I was going into my eighth grade year, I had a growth spurt of about seven inches and, suddenly, I wasn’t being called “midget” or “chubby” anymore. My basketball skills became sharper and I suddenly started gaining more respect as I became one of the best three-point shooters in the county. Playing sports has taught me to persevere through anything no matter what the circumstances are because it will always have a great outcome.

In addition to teaching me perseverance, sports have also taught me to be confident in myself. During the summer going into freshman year, I decided to start playing football. This decision changed my life forever. As soon as I started playing, I loved the sport and it caused me to stop playing basketball. It was clear that I was naturally gifted at football. Having never tackled a person before, I went on to make a perfect tackle in my very first football drill which changed my fate and personality forever. While being skilled at tackling, I was still always put down by one of our coaches because I was always “soft.” This means that I didn’t have the aggression and hard work that it took to play football. I took it very personally and it destroyed me on the inside. That was a sign that I needed to get physically fit for this sport and that I had to change my weak attitude. Knowing that someone thought I was “soft,” I went on to gaining forty-five pounds in four months (going from 145-190 pounds) and becoming the starting middle linebacker on the varsity football team. People started to respect me in every way and people were fearing me. People who didn’t respect before were now respecting me. I gained a great amount of confidence from playing organized sports and it has sculpted me into the man I am today.

How will this affect my college experience or my contribution to the UF campus community? I will be more involved than most students in the University of Florida. I will have the confidence to march into clubs and be a leader. I will be able to create organizations that will contribute to the university. Confidence plays a huge role in college. The confidence I have makes me a great leader. Being president of three clubs in high school, I know how to be an effective leader and get kids to follow my lead. I have outstanding qualities that allow me to be a great leader such as being responsible, diligent, hard working, trustworthy, intelligent, and persistent. If I had never played organized sports, I would never have had the drive and confidence that I have today.



I played sports once. Playing sports taught me a lot of things too. Principally, it taught me to stop playing sports and appreciate the value of spectatorship.

Anyway, I think the person you are today doesn’t need to use the hackneyed phrase “If it were not for X, I wouldn’t be the person I am today” or “X sculpted me into the man I am today” All that kind of phrase reveals is that the person you are today is the same as every other person today. (Seriously. Every single person on the planet says that at one time or another, and usually in college application essays. In fact, every child says it as soon as the doctor slaps it on the back: If it weren’t for nine months in the womb, I would be the person I am today - a statement which at least has the virtue of being true.)

But let’s get serious. You end the first paragraph with “getting involved in sports was definitely a life changing experience.” A lot of readers and writers tend to privilege the last sentence of the first paragraph; they tend to think it is the place where an essay’s overarching topic is defined. That’s the place, in short essays, where folks tend to put their thesis statement, for example. You don’t have to put anything like a thesis statement in a personal statement of this kind, but you ought to be aware that your reader may pay particular attention to that sentence. It’s important, therefore, to avoid saying anything too silly.

Of course there’s nothing silly at all about saying “getting involved in sports was definitely a life changing experience for me,” and having a theme or a topic for your essay is a very good idea; it tends to make the essay as a whole a lot more coherent. But I think that statement acquires a little bit of unintended, retrospective silliness when you inform the reader, in the next paragraph, that you got involved in competitive sports when you were five years old. It’s as though you were asking your reader to imagine that once you were irresponsible, you lacked integrity, you wanted confidence, and you undervalued hard work, but all that changed when, at the age of five, you took up sports. (Perhaps that is what you meant, but I think in that case you are being unfair to your inner child.) You can avoid that problem by, for example, clarifying the gradual character of the transformation, or by just changing the original formulation of your topic; i.e., instead of calling it a “life-changing experience” you could call it something like “a series of experiences that helped to shape how I view life and approach its many obstacles” (or something at least as specific, but perhaps less crude than that).

It’s also important to clarify the lesson or lessons you have learned from your experiences. You say “playing sports has taught me to persevere through anything no matter what the circumstances are because it will always have a great outcome.” But I’m not sure you got the right lesson here. Again, this is a bit of a hackneyed phrase. And, again, it’s especially important to avoid cliches on college application essays because every other student will resort to the same tired cliches, and so, instead of differentiating yourself with a tale of perseverence through obstacles and ultimate triumph, you will end up being indistinguishable from the thousands of other applicants to the same university with the same experience. In any case, the “great outcome” in your case is presumably due both to your perseverance and hard work and to the fortuitous growth spurt of seven inches in one year. It’s not true in general that perseverance alone guarantees a great outcome, and your story proves that point. There is nothing noble in believing that perseverance guarantees a good outcome, even though that is what everyone seems to think and say. What’s noble is persevering even in the midst of doubt. It is noble and admirable to keep going even though you’ve no reason in the world to believe you will be anything other than the guy who is five inches short of a viable basketball player, and that, after all, is what you did. Perhaps that’s what your story should really be about.

Best, EJ.

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Fall is the time for high school seniors to begin college applications. For many the college essay can seem daunting. What should I write about? How will I make my essay interesting to an admissions committee? Where do I begin? You actually have many remarkable stories to tell that will set you apart from other applicants. Let’s take a look at how you can thoughtfully approach this task.

What is the purpose of the college essay?

The essay is a way for the admissions committee to see who you are beyond the basics of your application file. Your transcript, application form, letters of recommendation and resume give an overview of your hard work, interests and academic record. Your essay allows you to individualize your application by telling a personal story about what is important to you. The essay also shows the committee how well you write. Can you structure a meaningful essay that interests the reader, conveys a unique message and flows well?

What should I write about?

The college essay is a personal narrative. This essay should be all about YOU! Take some time for self-reflection. What is important to you? What are your values? What do you want the admissions committee to know about you that isn’t already reflected in your application?

• Have you faced a challenge in your life that you overcame, e.g., demanding academics, health concerns, learning disabilities, family or financial struggles?

• Do you have a story to tell about your family traditions, cultural or ethnic background?

• Have you experienced a life-changing event that stretched your thinking and changed your perspectives?


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